concept comic script by Connor Bailey
[1.] CLOSE UP VIEW OF A YOUNG MAN'S FACE, HE WEARS THICK GLASSES WITH CIRCULAR LENSES, SHADOWED IN DARKNESS ONLY THE LEFT SIDE OF HIS FACE IS VISIBLE AND TO THE RIGHT OF THE PANEL, THE REST IS DARKNESS. HE NARRATES.
CASHIER: [I've seen him before, once before.]
[2.] OUTSIDE WIDE SHOT OF CONVENIENCE STORE EXTERIOR LATE AT NIGHT. BRIGHT LIGHTS IMITATE FROM THE STORE WINDOWS AND THE SILHOUETTE OF A LONE CASHIER IS SEEN FROM ONE OF THE WINDOWS
CASHIER: [I was working the overnight shift. Coworker called out sick, I was alone]
[3.] VIEW OF FRONT COUNTER, THE CASHIER, OUR NARRATOR READING A MAGAZINE, IN THE FOREGROUND A MAN IS WALKING IN THE FRONT DOOR CHIMES DA-DING
CASHIER: “Hello welcome to foodie ma-”
UNKNOWN MAN: click
[4.] REVERSE SHOT SHOWING THE MAN FROM BEHIND THE SHOULDER OF THE CASHIER, HE'S A BRUISED GREY HAIRED MAN WEARING TORN BLOODIED CLOTHES, HE JUST GOT OUT OF A FIGHT, CARRYING A 357 MAGNUM HE POINTS IT SHAKILY AT THE CASHIER, THE CASHIER IS NODDING
BLOODY MAN: “Don't fuckin’ move man”
[5.] WIDE SHOT OF THE BLOODY MAN HOPPING OVER THE COUNTER, HE ISN'T ATTACKING THE CASHIER, THE CASHIER IS BACKING AWAY
CASHIER: [The crazy asshole hopped the counter and nestled under my register, scared as a bug he was.]
[1.] PROFILE SHOT OF THE BLOODY MAN LOOKING UP AT THE CASHIER, HE'S SHAKEN, THE GRIP ON HIS GUN STRONG STILL POINTING IT AT THE CASHIER, HE HISSES IN A HUSHED TONE
BLOODY MAN: “I'm not here man. I'm not here”
CASHIER: [I was scared too, too scared to speak. I just nodded along]
[2.] CLOSE UP OF CASHIERS EYES OPEN WIDE EYED AND SHOCKED AS THE DOOR DA DINGS AGAIN
[3.] SHOT OF THE AUTOMATIC DOOR OPENING WITH MYSTERIOUS SMOKE TRAILS CREEPING INSIDE THE STORE.
CASHIER: [I felt a chill crawl down my back]
CASHIER: [The room must've dropped twenty degrees]
[4.] SHOT FROM BEHIND THE SHIVER'S SHOULDER LOOKING AT AN EXTREMELY NERVOUS CASHIER WHO IS SWEATING
CASHIER: “W-We-Welcome to foo-d-d-ie mar-t-t!
SHIVER: “Good evening.”
SHIVER: “Got a question for you.”
[5.] LOW ANGLE WIDE SHOT FROM BELOW THE COUNTER OF THE BLOODY MAN, THE SHIVER LOOMS ABOVE THE OTHER SIDE OF THE COUNTER TALKING TO THE CASHIER, THE BLOODY MAN IS VISIBLY TENSING UP GRITTING HIS TEETH USING HIS GUN TO PROD THE CASHIERS LEGS
SHIVER: “I'm looking for someone. White male, long gray hair and beard. See anybody like that come in?”
CASHIER: “N-no, it's been pretty quiet tonight. Nobody's come in for a few hours.”
[1.] CLOSE UP ON THE SHIVER FROM THE PERSPECTIVE OF THE CASHIER, HE'S REACHING A HAND INTO HIS COAT
SHIVER: “I heard he shot down a couple folks a few miles away, nasty work.”
SHIVER: “Here, take this photo I have of the guy.”
[2.] MID SHOT OF THE CASHIER LOOKING AT THE PHOTO WITH ONE HAND, THE OTHER SILENTLY TAPPING ON THE COUNTER
SHIVER: “Ring any bells?”
CASHIER: “Sorry sir, I haven’t seen him.”
SHIVER: “Alright kid if that's your final answer…”
CASHIER: “It's the only answer I got sir but I'll keep an eye out. Anything else?”
CASHIER: [First time I've been honest to him. It was the only thing I could say.]
[3.] CLOSE UP ON THE CASHIER'S FINGER TAPPING ON THE COUNTER, HE'S USING HIS FINGER TO POINT DOWN TO TRY AND SIGNAL THE SHIVER
CASHIER: [I prayed he would get what I was trying to do.]
CASHIER: [If he left me alone i would be dead, same if I begged him to help me]
[4.] CLOSE UP OF THE SHIVERS FACE, HE CLEARLY RECOGNIZES WHAT THE CASHIER IS TRYING TO TELL HIM.
BLOODY MAN (from the right of the panel): “I'LL KILL YOU!”
[5.] WIDE SHOT PEERING THROUGH THE WINDOW, SHIVER AND THE CASHIER LOOK OVER TO SEE THE BLOODY MAN AT THE OTHER END OF THE STORE IN A SHOOTING STANCE
CASHIER: [HE MUST'VE CRAWLED AWAY WHILE WE WERE TALKING]
SHIVER: “GET DOWN!”
CASHIER: “Shit!”
[1.] WIDE SHOT OF THE SHIVER BEING BLASTED WITH THREE SHOTS FROM THE BLODDY MAN’S REVOLVER, THE CASHIER DIVES DOWN TO THE GROUND. THE BLOODY MAN HAS A FRENZIED SMILE.
SHIVER: “hrgk!”
SHIVER: [Too late to phase through. No choice but to take my lumps.]
SHIVER: [I take two in the chest, one in the shoulder]
SHIVER: [Feels like fire spreading through my whole body.]
[2.] SHOT TOWARDS THE FRONT DOOR WITH THE SHIVER LAYING ON THE FLOOR, THE BLOODY MAN TURNS HIS ATTENTION BACK TO THE CASHIER THINKING SHIVER DEAD.
SHIVER: [Get up.]
SHIVER: [Have to. Get up.]
BLOODY MAN: “YOU… Little bastard think you could cheat me?”
[3.] CLOSE UP SHOT OF THE CASHIERS TERRIFIED FACE
CASHIER: [Dead. I’m dead, I thought.]
[4.] CLOSE UP SHOT OF THE BLOODY MAN’S SMILING MOUTH, HE ENJOYS THIS. HE’S PLAYING WITH HIS FOOD, HE THINKS HE’S IN THE CLEAR.
SHIVER: [He’s playing with the poor kid. Good.]
SHIVER: [Gives me more time.]
BLOODY MAN: “Look kid. I’ll give you a break.”
BLOODY MAN: “You get me all the money in your register in five seconds and you get an open casket funeral, deal?”
[5.] CLOSE UP OF THE HAMMER OF THE BLOODY MANS REVOLVER COCKING BACK TO INDICATE HE’S ABOUT TO SHOOT, THE SOUND OF THE REGISTER OPENING IS HEARD.
[1.] SAME SHOT AS PANEL [2] FROM PAGE 4 BUT THIS TIME THE BLOODY MAN HAS A SCARED STRAIGHT EXPRESSION STILL LOOKING TOWARDS THE CASHIER. SHIVER IS IN THE PROCESS OF GETTING UP LIKE JASON OR MICHAEL MYERS, SHIVER’S BODY MAKES A CREAKY SOUND AS HE GETS UP.
SHIVER: [Enough time to heal.]
[2.] PULL BACK FOR A FULL SHOT SIDE VIEW OF THE BLOODY MAN SHOOTING HIS LAST THREE BULLETS INTO THE SHIVER, THE BULLETS PASS RIGHT THROUGH AS THE SHIVER ADVANCES TOWARDS HIM
CASHIER: [The last thing I saw, from my hiding spot behind the counter]
[3.] FULL SHOT OF THE DOUBLE DOORS FROM BEHIND OF THE BLOODY MAN THE SHIVER PUTS BOTH HANDS AROUND HIS SHOULDERS AND IS PULLING HIM OUT INTO THE DARKNESS OF OUTSIDE.
CASHIER: [Was that man dragging him away.]
CASHIER: [Into the abyss.]
[4.] CLOSE UP OF THE DARKNESS BEYOND THE DOUBLE DOORS
THE SHIVER: “Thanks kid.”
CASHIER: [I think I saw a ghost.]